Activity 2

UNIT 2 Characters counts

Writing: Descrie an experience that taught you a lesson

ERROR CORRECTION: Correct the three errors in punctuating adjective clauses.

ORIGINAL VERSION

While working at my first job, which was a clothing store, I had a co-worker who got me into a lot of trouble. She had stolen some money from the cash register and then blamed me. I insisted on my innocence, but my supervisor who did not believe me fired me that day.

Ten years later, I got an e-mail, that stunned me. It was from the woman who had gotten me fired. She was writing to tell me how sorry she was for what she had done! I now realize that the experience that cost me my job also taught me a valuable lesson. Sometimes people hurt themselves when they cheat or lie more than people they lie to or about. This incident which I had almost forgotten still troubled my former co-worker, even after all these days.

CORRECTED VERSION

While working at my first job, which was a clothing store, I had a co-worker who got me into a lot of trouble. She had stolen some money from the cash register and then blamed me. I insisted on my innocence, but my supervisor, who did not believe me, fired me that day.
Ten years later, I got an e-mail that stunned me. It was from the woman who had gotten me fired. She was writing to tell me how sorry she was for what she had done! I now realize that the experience that cost me my job also taught me a valuable lesson. Sometimes people hurt themselves when they cheat or lie more than people they lie to or about. This incident, which I had almost forgotten still troubled my former co-worker, even after all these days.

Step 1. Prewriting. Using information questions to generate ideas. Think about an incident in your life that though you a lesson. The write questions about the incident to help generate ideas.

• Who was involved?
My parents and I
• What happened?
I crash in the highway
• When did happen that event?
3 years ago
• Where did happen that event?
In the highway Cordoba-Veracruz
• Why did happen?
Because I exceed the velocity limits.
• How did happen?
A tire exploded

Step 2. Writing. On a separate sheet of paper, describe the experience that taught you a lesson, using the answers to your questions. Include details, using adjective clauses when possible.
Like 3 years ago I was driving to Veracruz in the highway and I was too fast like 160 km/h, everything was fine until that a tire exploded and I lost control of the car in which were my parents and my brother too, the accident was not as strong, we just scared and only that. Then I calmed and change the tire and we continue our trip to Veracruz, since that I drive more slow and carefully.

Step 3. Self-Check.
Did you include adjective clauses?
YES
Did you set off non-restrictive adjective clauses with commas?
NO
Were you able to add any more details, using adjective clauses?
YES